Introduction to Revision Piece

I chose our first time writing as my revision piece. I chose this piece because it was the first time I have ever written anything with a time limit. Writing for me is extremely stressful, and adding the time limit created even more anxiety during this assignment. In the assignment I was asked to develop a thesis-driven discussion that demonstrates how the film Bend It Like Beckham defines what it is to be an outsider and how this supports or challenges my own beliefs.

During the process of writing this piece the first time around, my mind was clouded with stress and I made several mistakes. My main mistake was not including what my own beliefs of what an outsider are. It’s hard to discuss how the film challenges or supports my beliefs if I don’t include them in the piece. In my revision I was sure to include this in the very first paragraph and I wrote, “When I think of an outsider, I think of someone who is alienated from society because they choose to live their life differently from the people around them”.


In my first piece I had a tendency to summarize rather than give an analysis. Although, I struggled with the line between summary and analysis, I attempted to have more analysis and fewer summaries in my revision. Hopefully, being minus the time restraint I was able to make improvements to this piece.